I've always loved Laura Ingalls Wilder books. She had a unique way of describing Christmas through the eyes of a young girl. The holiday in the 1800s was nothing like the one we celebrate today, but the excitement children felt back then was equally as exhilarating.
Christmas has always been my favorite time of year, but I find it strange that I haven't penned any holiday scenes into my historical novels. When I stopped and pondered why, I concluded that as I've grown older, the magic has slipped away. People have died, rifts have divided the family, and thinking about those happier times, dims the current season. Or maybe, because I'm a pantser, my characters led me into a totally different season. Yeah, that must be it. (smile) If I'd written a Christmas scene, this might be what you'd read:
Wiping the mist from the window, Sally O’Dell strained to
see through the blizzard’s white wall. The barn, only a short distance from the
front door, had disappeared in the barrage of snow. The footprints Pa had left only minutes before no longer showed. Though the house smelled of pine needles and cinnamon, she
worried that Christmas’ most important guest, Santa, wouldn’t be able to find
her in the storm. A chill seeped
around the recently installed glass and peppered her arms with goosebumps.
Sally closed the splintery shutters, rubbed her forearms and turned to her mother, who
straightened from the cast-iron stove, holding a browned apple pie. “Momma, are you sure Santa can fly in
this weather?”
“Don’t fret, Sally, you’ll cause wrinkles in that pretty
little ten-year-old face of yorn.” Eliza O’Dell placed her pie with the others
she’d baked in the stove she’d received as a gift last year and smiled. “Santa can do anything.” She
swiped her hands down her apron,
walked to the fireplace, and straightened the stockings hanging there.
"Be a darlin' and climb up to the loft and check to see if your sister's
awake." ©gingersimpson
But, since I'm lacking the holiday spirit in my writing, I hope I make up for it with some tension and emotions that cause you to feel like you're walking in my character's shoes. Odessa, my latest historical release, tells of a young woman on her way to a new and better life her father has planned for her in Phoenix. Set in the 1880s, their current town has become overrun with outlaws, scoundrels, and her pa feels she needs the influence of her Aunt Susan now that ma has died. Unfortunately, along the way, the wagon overturns, Pa is pinned beneath it and dies. This scene is of Odessa, spending her first night alone in the middle of the Arizona desert:
The thought of being alone at night raised the hairs on the
back of her neck. Predators filled this barren land and she had no desire to
become a meal for one. Something rustled through the nearby scrub brush. She
jumped, but sighed when she heard nothing further. At least if she remained with
the wagon, she’d have some sort of shelter and could start fresh in the morning.
She’d spent the night with Granny’s lifeless body in the house, so being with
Papa was the lesser of her concerns. He loved her in life, and death wouldn’t
change that. Perhaps he’d watch over her and keep her safe.
Odessa propped the rifle against the wagon, hung the canteens
and pouch from a wheel hub and spread the blanket by the tailgate. Her stomach
rumbled. She hadn’t eaten since breakfast. Papa had planned to stop for an
early dinner in a good place to camp for the night, but the trip hadn’t lasted
that far.
She dropped to
the ground, tucked her skirt around her legs, and pulled a sandwich wrapped in
a blue-checkered cloth from the basket. The thought that Papa lay only a few
feet away stole the taste from the ham and brought tears to her eyes again. While
she chewed, she watched the bright orange sun sink lower in the western sky. Her
heart hammered with dread of the coming night.
The temperature dipped along with the sunlight. The air grew
cold and raised goose bumps on Odessa’s arms. She kept vigil at the end of the
wagon and snuggled beneath her blanket. A golden slice of moonlight hovered
above. The outline of the nearby saguaros took on a human appearance. Arms and
legs and faces masked by darkness. She shivered as a coyote howled in the
distance.
Before long, another desert dog launched into a hair-raising
cry, only to be answered by yet another. This one sounded too close. Letting go
of the blanket, Odessa reached for the carbine and pulled the weapon across her
lap. She’d never shot at anything other than a bottle on a tree stump, but
having the rifle slowed her racing heart.
Her gaze scanned the shadows for movement. An occasional
rustling indicated something small skittering about, but that didn’t frighten
her as much as the continued yowling that grew nearer. Her rigid shoulders
ached and her eyes blurred from staring. Despite only muted moonlight, being so
exposed made her uncomfortable.
What if the remaining food attracted the coyotes? Odessa pushed the basket back beneath
the wagon then realized a dead body was more likely to attract scavengers than
her meager fare. Feeling foolish, she stood and gathered her canteens, then lay
on the dusty ground and inched her way back beneath the tailgate, pulling the rifle
in with her. There was not room enough to spread the blanket, and despite the
stickers and pebbles poking at her, she’d much prefer the discomfort to the
sharp teeth of a hungry animal.
On her stomach and clutching her weapon, Odessa peered into the
darkness. She focused on happier times when Granny was still alive and had told
stories of her own childhood. Most of them were tall tales, but what she
wouldn’t give to be back next to the hearth and a roaring fire, listening to
those yarns. Her favorite had always been about the ghost who lived in the
pasture, but the fright Granny inspired by telling her spirit story was nothing
compared to the lump of terror building in Odessa’s belly. She never realized
the night held so many strange noises.
For what seemed like hours, she struggled to stay awake. The
day had taken its toll and her eyelids drooped. Her head sagged to the ground. Inhaling
dust, she sneezed, and tugged the blanket up between her cheek and the dirt. She settled once more and hoped sleep
would come at last.
Somewhere between dozing and consciousness, an angry growl
yanked her awake. A pair of glowing yellow eyes stared at her from outside her
shelter. Her heart pounded like hooves against the dirt, her breath caught in
her throat. Death was but inches away and she couldn’t move.
If nothing else, perhaps I've made you feel safe and warm where you are now. I wish for each of you the happiest of holidays and a blessed New Year. Thanks, Lindsday and crew for letting me hog some space today.
Odessa is offered through Eternal Press and featured on my Amazon page.
Odessa is offered through Eternal Press and featured on my Amazon page.
7 comments:
I'd never have made it as pioneer! Yes, you made me glad to be where I am, sugar!
Thanks, Gail, and thanks to the crew here at Historical Fiction Excerpts for allowing me time and space on their blog. Historical facts about the old west always interest me, and I love being whisked back to that time period.
Loved your excerpt and loved your Christmas scene. I could picture that blowing snow and little girl at the window.
Merry Christmas!
Thanks, Ro. I hope I had more visitors than the comments show. I made myself wish it wasn't too late to write a Christmas story. :)
Ginger, I feel in love with this story the first time I started critiquing it. I LOVE these type of stories!! Love your excerpt.
~Marie~
Wow, great blurb. I also love stories like this.
And no, it's not too late for a Christmas scene.
On my TBB list.
Lorrie
Thanks, Marie and Lorrie for coming to comment. And, Lorrie, no it's not too late for a Christmas Scene, but a whole story??? *lol* I don't move that fast these days. Plus I have gifts to wrap and fudge to make.
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